It didn't make any sense at first
but now all the pieces join together
What i thought wasn't love
has become my soul forever....
Captivated,destroyed and spoiled
i sunk into your closed embrace
with a kiss that lasted a hundred years
with the rush the heart didn't explain..
If its lust to make me this crazy
i'd want nothing more...
If' its love to make me weak at knees
i'd promise to love till my lips go sore!
but now all the pieces join together
What i thought wasn't love
has become my soul forever....
Captivated,destroyed and spoiled
i sunk into your closed embrace
with a kiss that lasted a hundred years
with the rush the heart didn't explain..
If its lust to make me this crazy
i'd want nothing more...
If' its love to make me weak at knees
i'd promise to love till my lips go sore!
Four Lines - packed with passion.
ReplyDeleteSuperbly written.
One suggestion - avoid pictures as they distract the reader from your beautiful writing
:) :) :) thank you!! will take your advice.. i like kinda putting pictures though
Delete+1 for Vikram, could not agree more!
DeleteAwesome words! Very well written. Congratulations!
thanks a lot :) :)
DeleteDamm it, this made me Blush! Haha..
ReplyDeleteAwesome poem :) Very nicely written.
: ):) thanks
DeleteThis is so beautiful... I haven't read someone write about love and lust in such simple words :)
ReplyDeleteaaww thank u :)
DeleteThat was lovely doc !
ReplyDeletethanks jaish :)
Deletepowerful lines..lovely
ReplyDeleteHi Sneha.. I would like to present you with this sweet gift..you deserve it :)
ReplyDeletePlease go to the link to find it
http://canvascribbles.blogspot.in/2012/07/my-first-blog-award-leibster-award.html
omg omg!!! thank you!!!!!!!! :) :) :) :)
DeleteHi Sneha, You are most welcome...well you can save the pic on your desktop, and on your blog settings just go to "add a pic" (via add gadgets) and upload where ever u want on your blog.. and do not forget to follow the simple rules associated with it which you might have read at my link.. (just to keep the sanctity of this award ..;p)
DeleteI hope this helps you out...
yes neha.. got it!!! thank you so much! you just made my day!!
Deletethat was really nice.. four words :D
ReplyDeletehaha thank you :)
DeleteWOW.. Amazing :)
ReplyDeletethanks sonia :)
DeleteReally passionate and wonderful !!!
ReplyDelete:) :) thank you
DeleteLovely sentiments :)
ReplyDeletehey your first comment for me!! thabk you so much!! welcome to my blog!
DeleteThose last four lines sum it up.
ReplyDeleteGood job, Sneha :)
thanks a lot :) :) :)
Deletefor lines of compassion .....grt poetry :)
ReplyDeletethank you saikat!!
DeleteI am reading your poetry for the first time-it is beautiful!!!!
ReplyDeletewelcum indu.. hope u like the other posts too!:)
DeleteStunning!!
ReplyDeleteIt didn't make any sense at first
but now all the dots are connected.
What i thought was just a piece of scribbling
is turned out to be a piece of mastery.
Nice work doc! :) :)
hahaha!! well there is so much of taunts and compliments so subtly mixed there, i cant recognize which is which!! :
Deletenyways thanks a lot :)
lol.. then I certainly messed it up.. M not a poet like you.. I can barely write.. :D
Deletehahahah!! naa u made a good version of my first four lines!! :) :)
Deleteclass !!
ReplyDeletethanks sagar!! :)
DeleteBeautiful Poem!
ReplyDeletesimply awesome...loved the last four lines...so true
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